WALT: analyse my writing using the rubrics to assess and score my writing
SUCCESS CRITERIA:
I know I will be successful when I can
- Know what level I will use
- identify the different elements and show what they are in my writing by highlighting these examples
- comment on what I have achieved
- comment on my next learning
My heart started to beat faster as we approach the starting line, all I could feel is my body shaking, and my stomach spinning as I was getting ready, my body stop as I heard a big bang at the back of me, and we were off people rushing to finish and most flying past people one by one.
First lap and already I was tired one foot in front of the other, as I rushed up the hill as I got to the top I had stop, only to start running again and as I came rushing down the hill with my family by my side, my leg click as I ran faster down the hill, and I did not want to run again but with the support of my family I was off first lap down two more laps to go, it was the only thing I could think of as we made it up the hill for the second time all I could feel was my feet wanting to stop it felt like they were going to snap.
As me and my sister was racing to the end all we felt was overwhelmed as we made to the finish line one more lap to go as my sister tells me, and already people was cheering for me at the moment I was coming second, kura was coming first and really I did not want to go to ohaeawai, but when it came to my family they just carried on say “ run faster faster” so therefore me and my sister for the last time went running up the hill and down around Whaea Meri and I had the biggest stitch ever and with my leg feeling like it was going to break but around the cone I went, racing to the finish line as we passed three cone the only thing I could think of was two more cones to do.
Cone by cone as me and my sister raced to finish our last lap my sister was tired and so was I, I could feel the pain in my feet all the way through my leg but it was not long until I was finish so the last cone and I was finished yay my sister hugged me but really she choked me but I did not mind because I was finish but the one bad thing was I am off to ohaeawai and when I sat down I could see gerry coming behind me, I was happy because she was coming with me to Ohaeawai.
My day started off a mess then as soon as I saw my family I was happy But once again I was angry because my run was so long just thinking about it gave me a headache but in the end I was finish and I don’t have to do it again well so I though .
What the colours are there for.
Light blue - Ideas
Purple - structure and language
Green -punctuation
Yellow - Organisation
Light green - Vocabulary
Red - Spelling mistakes.
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